This article needs to combine four articles to write my own views on cooperation
1. https://www.thecrimson.com/article/2012/8/30/academic-dishonesty-ad-board/
2. https://slate.com/news-and-politics/2012/09/harvard-cheating-scandal-everyone-has-it-wrong-the-students-should-be-celebrated-for-collaborating-on-an-unfair-test.html
3. https://blogs.ams.org/phdplus/2013/02/03/the-take-home-lesson-from-the-harvard-cheating-scandal/
4. https://ila.onlinelibrary.wiley.com/doi/full/10.1002/jaal.1002
I have written this essay but I need to revise a lot of things
SynthesisEssay Assignment:
Complete rough draft due date: Monday March 23
Final Draft Due (tentative): Friday April 3
Grade value of assignment: 100 points
Suggested length of assignment: 1000-1500 (not including reference page)
Format requirements: double spaced, font size 12, 1 in. margins
Assignment description: For this assignment, you will write an essay on the topic of collaboration in the modern world.
Please explain what modern collaboration looks like and evaluate the effects of modern collaboration (positive or negative).
The purpose of the essay is:
· to show your comprehension of class readings
· to identify effects of modern collaboration
· to support your evaluation of these effects
You must incorporate at least three class readings and one reading from your own research into your paper.
Writing skills to practice: ability to 1) synthesize readings, 2) cite and reference sources appropriately, 3) paraphrase and summarize appropriately, 4) write cohesively, 5) write in formal language, 6) use cause/effect transition words accurately, 5) self-edit writing
Grading criteria:
Your essay will be graded on the criteria on the back of this page (out of 100 pts total):
Essay Rubric
Content: /30 points |
The student shows thorough understanding of the effects of modern collaboration |
The student shows ability to think critically |
The student seems to have gained new knowledge about modern collaboration through this writing assignment (evidenced by number of citations) |
Effectiveness of writing: /30 points |
The introduction catches the reader’s interest |
The introduction appropriately introduces the topic |
The main point of the essay is clear |
The main idea of each paragraph is clear |
All claims are supported with convincing evidence |
The essay concludes effectively |
The essay is well organized |
The ideas in the essay are easy to follow |
The topic is covered thoroughly |
The arguments are logical |
Incorporation of Sources: /10 |
Outside sources are quoted, summarized, or paraphrased appropriately |
Outside sources are integrated into the essay appropriately |
In-text citations are properly formatted |
Reference list is formatted properly |
Sophistication/language: /10 |
The essay contains a mixture of sentence structures (simple, compound, complex) |
The essay contains advanced vocabulary |
Formal writing is used |
Grammar, mechanics, and format: /20 |
There are no major grammatical mistakes that leads to incomprehensibility |
The essay is easy to read because it does not contain many grammatical errors |
There are minimal errors in subject/verb agreement |
There are minimal errors in verb tense form |
There are minimal errors in part of speech |
There are minimal errors in mechanics (capitalization, spelling, paragraph indentation, punctuation, fragmented and run-on sentences) |
The essay is formatted according to standard conventions (title, name, date, etc.) |
Jiahang Lyu
MODERN COLLABORATION
The modern communication can take place via face to face or even across vast distance utilizing a range of communication tools. This can take place across school-day and at each level of schooling which include amongst administrators, with teachers and the administrators, between teachers, amongst each of the above mentioned alongside students, as well as amongst students themselves. The modern communication features students always want to come up together to do the take-home assignments together even if they are warned not to collude as was reflected in Harvard School where nearly one hundred students had colluded in mathematics assignment. Another common feature of modern collaboration is the increased use of communication tools or technologies to communicate and collaborate across a vast distance. Today, various communication tools are available for both teachers and students to collaborate between themselves and across themselves. These communication technologies are making collaboration easy and they are increasingly eroding the face to face collaboration.
Where collaboration works effectively, it can lead to something better than what a person can produce alone. This is because the synergies arise when people mix insights alongside worldviews to develop novel ideas and such ideas become exciting and enlightening. Thus, productive collaboration occurring in face-to-face meetings or across a far distance utilizing a range of tools for communication.
One of the positive effects of modern collaboration between teacher-educators in United States Southwest alongside in Southern Africa, for instance, is the importance of initiatives of cross-culture that assist beginning literacies teachers to learn how they can effectively employ the participatory methodological approaches to disturb conventional teacher-student hierarchy hence capitalizing on domestic resources and knowledge. Moreover, operating in such a hybrid space is positive since it helps the forefront building of a relationship as a vital element of novel teachers’ emergent practice (Rebecca, 2012).
Another positive effect of modern collaboration is that it accords the students of a mechanism by which to outgrow their present capacities and take on novel identities as learners. Indeed, such a modern collaboration allows students to craft scenarios with the potentials of challenging oppressive language ideologies. The modern collaboration between teacher and student remains positive since it allows us to make choices that permit him or her to construct as well as communicate findings that stand meaningful to him and the community. Indeed, modern collaboration embraces international co-teaching relationships which foster the critical language awareness of students as well as strengthening relationships with the classroom community (Salerno, 2013).
Another positive effect of modern collaboration is that it leads to desirable theories alongside practice synergy which arise whenever school and university personnel effectively collaborate and with their students. Indeed, modern collaboration helps results in co-author classroom teachers engaging in improvisational teaching which supports their secondary learners’ developing desired insights regarding communities’ racial injustices. This is because the teachers collaborate to entrench literacies strategies into middle school learners’ study of utmost latest United States presidential election to develop academic discourse via literacies which create desirable circumstances for literate involvement, learning, teaching, as well as acting in the globe. Modern collaboration also has positive effects in that it helps travel with integrities as face to face teacher professional leaner is translated to virtual and mixed spaces. This is important since it helps maintain collaboration with professional development which involve online spaces in leading literacy change department. A teacher-student collaboration help positively supports the development of student’s literacy. The modern collaboration leads to novel synergistic meanings which might be developed in collaborative environments. The novel insights acquired when collaborations remain balanced and generative make struggles thereby gaining an equal footing on playing grounds worth the attempt. This is positive since modern collaboration help appreciate what each player contributes.
One of the negative effects of modern collaboration is that it leads to cheating scandals amongst the students who collaborate due to the takeaway assignments. This was demonstrated in the Harvard cheating scandal whereby students were given take-home exams in a mathematics class during the Spring 2012 term course on “Introduction to Congress. The 279 students colluded and collaborated to produce similar responses to the questions which were a clear manifestation of having collaborated despite being instructed never to collaborate. This led to the suspension of 60 students and another 40 students receiving probation. Thus, modern collaboration negatively promotes cheating amongst the student which makes the student’s ability not to be appraised correctly and even led to the implication of students. Thus, modern collaboration ultimately hurt the students. Thus, such collaboration beats the main valuable aim of giving take-home assignments which remain useful testing and teaching tools (Manjoo, 2012).
Another negative effect of collaboration is that the students’ collaborative work increasingly makes it quite challenging for their teachers to assess their performances. This is because several people’s responses will sound identical, and this makes instructors unable to determine who comprehended the work and who was just free-riding. Thus, this negatively makes it hard for the Universities with predominant interests to measure each learner’s grasp of the class material when given take-home assignments. The negative effect also arises from the fact that students use online collaboration and hence talk about the exams with their friends which is indeed cheating.
Even though collaboration is a creative approach that should always be encouraged, there is a need to emphasize that only when such modern collaboration is used wisely and avoid cheating when warned by teachers. However, when the collaboration is misused by students even in doing take-home assignments which are intended to test individual performances, the collaboration will be at the very intension of such assignments as it will be difficult to assess who understood the class materials and those are merely joy-riding (Kelly,& Kathleen, 2019).
Name: Jiahang
This is the grade you would receive if you did not make any revisions to your synthesis paper. You have until April
3
to make all the revisions suggested in the rubric and in the comments posted in the text of your essay.
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(10) The student seems to have gained new knowledge about globalization through this writing assignment (evidenced by number of citations) |
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Incorporation of Sources: 10 points |
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(2) In-text citations are properly formatted |
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Sophistication and language: 10 points |
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(3) Formal writing is used |
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Grammar, mechanics, and format: 20 points |
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(2) There are no major grammatical mistakes that leads to incomprehensibility |
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(3) The essay is easy to read because it does not contain many grammatical errors |
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(3) There are minimal errors in verb tense form |
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(3) There are minimal errors in part of speech |
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(3) There are minimal errors in mechanics (capitalization, spelling, paragraph indentation, punctuation, fragmented and run-on sentences) |
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(3) The essay is formatted according to standard conventions (title, name, date, etc.) |
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I believe that you are using the wrong approach when you are writing this essay. It seems like your focus was on using a lot of advanced vocabulary. However, much of the essay did not make sense, as it was groups of beautiful sounding phrases that did not make sense when put together.
When re writing this essay, I would first make an outline of what you want to say. I would write this outline using the simplest English you possibly can, and focusing on making sure your ideas connect clearly to each other. When you actually start to write your essay from this outline, focus on clear and direct topic sentences that either describe your definition of modern collaboration, or clearly indicate what benefit or disadvantage you will be talking about in the paragraph. You should also make sure that each paragraph ends with a direct conclusion sentence that clearly and succinctly summarizes what you have said in the paragraph.
The fact that you did not include a reference list makes me unable to look at your references. However, looking at your writing, my guess is that there was a lot in your references that you did not understand. If you do not understand an idea in an outside source, it is a bad practice to try to talk about it in your essay. If you do not understand the idea yourself, your explanation of the idea will never be clear to other readers. If you do not understand an idea, it would be better to find another source or another idea from the source to use in your essay.