4 pages of Draft. Then after the feedback, i will upload to waypoint and get the feedback,then after you need to summarize the feedback in 400 words.
Purpose: The primary goal of this weekly assignment is to enable you to understand the revision process and revise your paper with the help of a writing specialist.
Prepare:
Step 1: Prepare a shortened version of your Final Paper (at least four pages) by including the following:
- Introduction paragraph and thesis statement you developed for your Week 3 Assignment.
- Background information of the global societal issue you have chosen.
- Brief argument supporting at least two solutions to the global societal issue.
- Conclusion paragraph.
- Must document any information used from at least five scholarly sources in APA style as outlined in the Ashford Writing Center’s Citing Within Your Paper (Links to an external site.) Note that you will need at least eight scholarly sources for your Final Paper in Week 5.
Step 2: After you have completed a rough draft of your paper, submit that draft to the Ashford Writing Center by using the instructions found in the
Paper Review (Links to an external site.)
page. Your paper will be returned within 24 hours, so give yourself enough time to complete and submit it prior to the due date.
Reflect: Carefully review the revision letter and the margin comments that you see on your returned paper. Consider each of the suggestions provided to help you to revise your paper.
Write:
What You Need to Submit to Waypoint:
- Upload the PDF document that contains the feedback from the Writing Center specialist.
- Submit the journal assignment answering the following questions in at least 400 words:
Identify the top three issues your writing specialist focused on in your rough draft (e.g., paragraph structure, proper use of quotations, thesis statement, etc.).
In what ways were those issues surprising?
Describe what you learned from some of the feedback your writing specialist provided as explanations.
Was this feedback helpful?
Evaluate the usefulness of the paper review tool.
In what ways did this activity improve your academic writing skills?
Will you use the Ashford Writing Center to review your work in the future? Why or why not?Identify Writing Center Video Tutorials (Links to an external site.) that you find most useful and explain why. Also, identify tutorial(s) you found least useful and explain why.
The journal part of the assignment does not need to be formatted in APA style; however, correct grammar, spelling, and punctuation is required.
Carefully review the
Grading Rubric (Links to an external site.)
for the criteria that will be used to evaluate your journal.
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Paper Title:
No. of Pages: 0
Paper Style: APA Paper Type: N/A
Taken English? Yes English as Second Language? No
Feedback Areas: General, N/A
Paper Goals: Prepare: Step 1: Prepare a shortened version of your Final Paper (at least four
pages) by including the following: Introduction paragraph and thesis statement
you developed for your Week 3 Assignment. Background information of the global
societal issue you have chosen. Brief argument supporting at
Proofing Summary:
Hi Casey,
I’m AJ, your composition tutor for the Writing Center. I have reviewed your submission and have several suggestions that will help you
revise. Please feel free to contact us through a 24/7 live writing session with any follow-up questions or for any clarification.
Below, you will find a revision plan along with margin comments within your paper. Use my suggestions as a starting point for the
revision process. Also, please note that I have not edited or proofread the entire draft for minor errors, but rather, focused on overall
concerns such as idea development.
This is a good start to your essay on global drug trade and trafficking. I thought you did a great job with immediately stating the
purpose of this paper and sticking to the overall theme of this purpose throughout the entirety of this assignment. In addition to this,
you also did very well in your efforts to ensure that the information in this paper was delivered in a highly organized fashion.
For your revisions, I suggest focusing on:
1. You have not yet addressed all of the items in the prompt. This prompt is a complicated one, to be sure. If you carefully break down
the prompt, you will see that it is asking for you to:
• discuss the problem,
• propose a solution to the problem,
• evaluate the validity, reliability, and biases of the sources you used in addition to pointing out where more research is needed, and
• show ethical implications of your proposed solution.
Please review the sample paper found in your course to help you to better understand the expectations of this assignment and to
complete all of the necessary sections.
When reviewing this sample paper, I would suggest paying extra attention to the level headings and the specific titles they used for
these headings. Consider using these level headings as a template for how you should organize them.
2. The introduction paragraph should end with a thesis statement that includes the societal problem, your proposed solution to the
societal problem and also the positive/negative ethical outcome of the solution. Consider following this format for your thesis: (Your
issue) should/should not ____. Instead, we should (insert your solutions to the problem). These solutions create (insert the positive
and negative ethical implications).
3. Develop your paragraphs more. In general, all paragraphs need to have 3 pieces:
P-Point—also known as your topic sentence where you state what the paragraph is about
I-Information—where you present your information (facts, details, quotes, and reasons)
E-Explanation—where you explain the relevance or importance of your information. Specifically for this essay, you should focus on
developing this part of your paragraphs. You did very well with making sure you used a strong amount of information, but now you
should work on supplementing your information with more personal analysis in your own words that explains the significance of your
information. Please be sure to do all of this when writing your paragraphs. For help with this, click here:
http://writingcenter.ashford.edu/body-paragraphs
Good luck in the course, and I hope we can help you with your next assignment.
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For more help with formatting your title page and running header click here:
http://writingcenter.ashford.edu/introduction-apa
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Make sure you are ending your
introduction with a clear thesis that
states the overall purpose of your
paper, and provides a general
introduction to the topics of your
following body paragraphs.
Keep in mind that this paper should be
organized into sections via level
headings. Consider reviewing the
template for this assignment to ensure
that you have addressed everything that
was required from you for this paper.
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Make sure you are citing all of your
sources in proper APA style.
For more help with in-text citations, use this guide: http://writingcenter.ashford.edu/citing-within-your-paper
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You do a great job of using plenty of citations
from scholarly resources in this section of
your paper, but you should consider
supplementing these citations with more
analysis in your own words to properly explain
the significance of these citations.
You do a good job here summarizing your
thoughts with your final sentence, but you
might consider adding a part to this sentence
that gives a general introduction to the topic of
the next paragraph.
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Consider developing your ideas in this paragraph to a greater extent. Keep in mind that all of your paragraphs should be
around 7-11 sentences in length. For help with this, click here:
http://writingcenter.ashford.edu/body-paragraphs
This is a good start to your conclusion, but
keep in mind your conclusion should
somewhat resemble your introduction
paragraph. It should summarize all the
thoughts brought up in this paper, restate
your thesis, and leave the reader with one
last memorable statement.
For your final draft, make sure that
you include sections in this essay
that cover your , the ethical
implications of your proposed
solution, and an evaluation of your
sources. Both of these sections are
necessary to complete this assignment.
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For help formatting your references page, click here: http://writingcenter.ashford.edu/format-your-reference-list
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