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ALYA AL HADDABI
05/14/2020
Buying local produce & health
1. Introduction
Suppose one informs you that our food system resembles an hourglass? How would you feel? Within the United States of American, there exist millions of farmers taking their product to the market. Then again, there millions of consumers who often make a preference for what they need to purchase. The linkage between farmers and consumers incredibly is a narrow association that is made up of a few big firms and chains of supermarkets
1. Opening Statement
Some months ago, to be precise in February this year, I happened to visit Wal-Mart to a little shopping for my grocery. What baffled me is the fact that all the items I purchased had been shipped from several miles away. Right now, it is the season for produce, and most of our farmers are eking out living from their firms to make ends meet. The foods attained from vast distances and shipped into our nations majorly have negative impacts. The impacts range from local economies, environments, and even such foods themselves. For instance, between 1980-1990, United Kingdom reported that the fact that food imports led to air pollutions (Slee 91). The emissions of carbon dioxide through the air became five times greater when compared to the emissions witnessed in road transport. From this statistic, it is clear that the global food marketplace leads to increased emission of greenhouse gases though that is not only the predicaments that are tied in with supermarkets (Thornburg 147). Others follow the suite.
1. Central Idea
Through consumptions of local produce, community members are in a position of engaging with their neighbors alongside assisting various businesses to grow within their towns.
1. Supporting Points
1st Logos and ethos
2nd Point: Healthier food s
1. Establish Credibility:
I mentioned earlier visiting Wal-Mart supermarket to do my grocery shopping. During that period, I talked about my close ally, who is one of the managers in the same supermarket. He provided various tactics that they often employ in bringing more significant revenues to the shop. Almost all the supermarkets are placing everyday items that people purchase mostly at their back stores. This is to assist in keeping you there on their premises to spend a lot of money. So, the information acquired is that supermarket employees are working towards keeping their clients for a more extended hour within the building even when what they need is not available. In most cases, the local produce is kept out also if such products are not fresh.
1. Motivation of audience
Over 33 million adults in American do grocery shopping daily. This totals to one person for every seven adults. Thus, it is safer to assume that nearly every person at some point in their life would have to visit the supermarket. However, most of the supermarkets are producing more substantial amounts of wastes arising from the used packaging as well as stuff that is turning bad while still within their stores. They are selling food products that are incredibly never fresh though they attempt making them look fresh through the use of misters.
TRANSITION:
Once the discussions of rhetorical strategies have been made, there exists an ideology that states that local businesses are creating a greater sense of communities within such individualistic societies of America.
1. Body
1. 1st Supporting Point:
0. This is an argument showing that most of the local products are excellent as compared to the chain farms. This is certainly backed with evidence of an individual’s health that makes people develop that thinking that each person cares.
0. Much money offered to the larger firms. These firms use the amounts in growing commodities like corn and soybeans that are major building blocks of the food chains (Nabhan 67).
0. With no profits, farms are compelled to sell their produce to the developers who are coming in to transform the atmospheres of small businesses together with the local economies.
TRANSITION: the prevailing ideology which crops up that through purchasing products locally, there are high possibilities that small producers are likely going to have a favorable atmosphere for doing businesses.
1. 2nd Supporting Point:
1. Through purchasing local products, it is imperative to note that consumers are likely going to have healthier food products as well as better surroundings in terms of environment (Ackerman-Leist, 45). The energy is needed in shipping products from one point to the other leads to waste products that are accumulative. Thus, such products are produced within the country, and then there would be no energy used in shipping products hence leading to a better environment in terms of pollution. There would be less fuel employed in transportation as well as the process of packing
1. Buying local produce promotes healthier products as well as the right tasting foods. This is tied to the fact that fresh foods often lose their nutrients swiftly. Therefore, when shipped from one place to the other, consumers would not be enjoying nutrients from the foods they buy.
1. If, by any chance, it happens that food products picked in the supermarkets for the past one to two days, when such products are fresh, then it means that they have been enhanced chemically to make appear fresh. This is dangerous for the life of people using the products.
TRANSITION: It is essential to look at your healthy for whatever products consumed. Healthiness entails the freshness of the products bought for consumption.
1. Conclusion
1. Summary of Main points
Today, we have talked about the consumption of local produce. Our local products are healthy and fresh as compared to imported products. Consumption of local products assists in boosting the local businesses in the country.
The main thing here is change. Change can only take place when people cease giving money to large firms that are supplying various chain stores for fast foods. It is imperative to provide more money to our local farms, which are doing all things possible to feed our neighbors with fresh products.
1. Closing Statement
As from now, since we have elucidated the merits of buying locally, the thing remaining is to implement what we have learned into practice to practice healthy living. It is my plea that as we make numerous steps to farmer’s markets, we should consider our well-being through purchasing healthy products for consumption.
Works Cited
Ackerman-Leist, Philip. Rebuilding the foodshed: How to create local, sustainable, and secure food systems. Chelsea Green Publishing, 2013.
Goodman, Jack. “Grocery shopping: who, where, and when.” The Time Use Institute (2008): 1-10.
Nabhan, Gary Paul. “Coming home to eat: The politics and pleasures of local foods.” (2002).
Slee, Tom. No One Makes You Shop at Wal-Mart: The Surprising Deceptions of Individual Choice. Between the Lines, 2006.
Thornburg, Gina K. “The shop-locally discourse in Jefferson County, Kansas.” Great Plains Research (2007): 145-154.
This table lists criteria and criteria group name in the first column. The first row lists level names and includes scores if the rubric uses a numeric scoring method.Criteria
Proficient
Competent
Improvement Needed
Non-Existent/Needs Work
Outline
4 points
Outline is in excellent organizational format with work cited at the bottom in correct citation format (APA).
3 points
Outline is in good organizational format with work cited at the bottom in correct citation format (APA).
2 points
Outline is in somewhat organizational format with work cited at the bottom in correct citation format (APA).
0 points
Outline is in not in organizational format with work cited at the bottom in correct citation format (APA) or no outline submitted.
4
/ 4
Introduction: Opening Statement
4 points
The Opening statement was powerful and captivated the audience |
3 points
The Opening Statement was good and interested the audience |
2 points
The Opening statement was somewhat sufficient and generally interested the audience |
0 points
The Opening statement was ineffective and did not captivate the audience |
4 / 4
Introduction: Central Idea
4 points
The CI was an excellent summary of the speech |
3 points
The CI was a good summary of the speech |
2 points
The CI was an adequate summary of the speech |
0 points
There was no clear Central Idea. |
4 / 4
Introduction: Supporting Points
4 points
The SP’s were effectively stated and mapped out the speech |
3 points
The SP’s were generally stated and mapped out the speech |
2 points
The SP’s were somewhat stated and gave a generally mapped out the speech |
0 points
The SP’s were not stated and there was no clear map of speech |
4 / 4
Introduction: Established Personal Credibility
4 points
The Speaker effectively establish their credibility |
3 points
The Speaker basically establish their credibility |
2 points
The Speaker somewhat establish their credibility |
0 points
The Speaker did not establish their credibility |
4 / 4
Introduction: Motivated the Audience
4 points
The Speaker effectively motivated the audience |
3 points
The Speaker generally motivated the audience |
2 points
The Speaker somewhat or indirectly motivated the audience |
0 points
The Speaker did not motivated the audience |
4 / 4
Topic: Audience
&
Speaker
2 points
The topic was clearly appropriate for the Audience & Speaker |
1 point
The topic was appropriate for the Audience & Speaker |
0.5 points
The topic was somewhat appropriate for the Audience & Speaker |
0 points
The topic was not appropriate for the Audience & Speaker |
2 / 2
Topic: Time Limits
8 points
The Speaker achieved their time limits |
6 points
The Speaker basically achieved their time limits (A little over or a little less) |
2 points
The Speaker went over or under their time limits |
0 points
The Speaker did not achieved their time limits |
8 / 8
Purpose: Clarity
2 points
The purpose of the speech was very clear and specific to the audience |
1 point
The purpose of the speech was clear to the audience |
0.5 points
The purpose of the speech was somewhat clear to the audience |
0 points
The purpose of the speech was not clear to the audience |
2 / 2
Purpose: Achieved
4 points
The purpose of the speech was successfully achieved |
3 points
The purpose of the speech was generally achieved |
2 points
The purpose of the speech was somewhat achieved |
0 points
The purpose of the speech was not achieved |
3 / 4
Organization: Intro, Body, Conclusion
4 points
The speech had a clearly defined I-B-C |
3 points
The speech had a generally defined I-B-C |
2 points
The speech had a somewhat defined I-B-C |
0 points
The speech did not have a defined I-B-C |
4 / 4
Organization: Transitions and Signposts
4 points
The Speaker mastered the use of transitions |
3 points
The Speaker had good use of transitions |
2 points
The Speaker somewhat used transitions |
0 points
The Speaker did not use transitions |
3 / 4
Organization: Main Points
4 points
Main points were exceptionally clear to the audience |
3 points
Main points were generally clear to the audience |
2 points
Main points were somewhat clear to the audience |
0 points
Main points were not clear to the audience |
4 / 4
Supporting Material: Credibility
4 points
The Speaker stated and/or displayed all sources correctly |
3 points
The Speaker stated and/or displayed most sources correctly |
2 points
The Speaker stated and/or displayed some sources correctly |
0 points
The Speaker did not state and/or display any sources correctly |
2 / 4
Supporting Material: Information was Varied and Interesting
4 points
The information was very interesting to the audience |
3 points
The information was interesting to the audience |
2 points
The information was somewhat interesting to the audience |
0 points
The information was not interesting to the audience |
4 / 4
Visual Aids: Design
4 points
Excellent design – added significant support to speech |
3 points
Decent design – added appropriate support |
2 points
General design – added some support |
0 points
VA’s did not support the speech |
2 / 4
Visual Aids: Control
4 points
The Speaker maintained control of VA’s throughout the entire speech |
3 points
The Speaker maintained control of VA’s throughout most of the speech |
2 points
The Speaker maintained control of VA’s throughout some of the speech |
0 points
The Speaker did not maintained control of VA’s throughout speech |
3 / 4
Delivery: Eye Contact
4 points
Speaker made consistent and sustained eye contact throughout speech |
3 points
Speaker made eye contact throughout most of speech |
2 points
Speaker made some eye contact throughout speech |
0 points
Speaker made little or no eye contact throughout speech |
3 / 4
Delivery: Voice & Tone
4 points
Voice was consistently sustained and leveled |
3 points
Voice was generally sustained and leveled |
2 points
Voice was monotone or sub-level, sometimes inaudible |
0 points
Voice was inaudible |
4 / 4
Delivery: Gestures & Posture
4 points
Gestures were controlled and effective |
3 points
Gestures were generally controlled and effective |
2 points
Gestures were somewhat controlled and/or distracted from message |
0 points
Gestures were ineffective and distracted from message |
4 / 4
Delivery: Flow
4 points
Speech had a consistent smooth pace |
3 points
Speech had a generally smooth pace |
2 points
Speech had a somewhat smooth pace; there were some awkward pauses |
0 points
Speech did not have a smooth pace; there were many awkward pauses |
3 / 4
Delivery: Energy
4 points
The Speaker maintained high energy throughout speech |
3 points
The Speaker maintained decent energy throughout speech |
2 points
The Speaker had some energy throughout speech |
0 points
The Speaker had no energy throughout speech |
4 / 4
Conclusion: Summarized Main Points
4 points
Main points of the speech were clearly and specifically restated |
3 points
Main points of the speech were generally restated |
2 points
Main points of the speech were somewhat restated; no direct reference to main points |
0 points
Main points of the speech were not restated |
4 / 4
Conclusion: Closing Statement
4 points
The Closing statement was powerful and captivated the audience |
3 points
The Closing Statement was good and interested the audience |
2 points
The Closing statement was somewhat sufficient and generally interested the audience |
0 points
The Closing statement was ineffective and did not captivate the audience |
4 / 4
Audience Centered/Adapted to Listeners & Ethics: Sources, Viewpoints & Purpose
4 points
The Speaker was very conscious of their presentation skills, and relating and responding to the audience & |
3 points
The Speaker mostly considered the audience with the elements of the speechmaking process and mostly monitored and engaged the audience
& The Speaker was generally conscious of their presentation skills, and relating and responding to the audience |
2 points
The Speaker occasionally considered the audience with the elements of the speechmaking process and occasionally monitored and engaged the audience & The Speaker was somewhat conscious of their presentation skills, and relating and responding to the audience |
0 points
The Speaker somewhat and/or did not considered the audience with the elements of the speechmaking process and did not monitored and engaged the audience
&
The Speaker was not conscious of their presentation skills, and relating and responding to the audience
3 / 4
Rubric Total ScoreTotal
90 / 100
Feed Back:
good intro w/establishing credibility; good tone of voice; need more eye contact for audience engagement; too much text in your ppt, be sure to reduce it in final speech; make sure you control your slides; mostly good transitions between slides/ideas, a few were awkward & interrupted your flow; good use of imagery; not enough oral citations; good concluding statement & summary; time 7:26
The purpose of this assignment is for you to identify how well you met each section of the grading sheet. Please answer 5 of the following 10 questions in full sentence format. In addition, conclude with an overall evaluation of yourself as a speaker. Please number your responses!
1. Audience Analysis/Topic: What was your greatest strength and weakness? Explain why these were strengths and weaknesses.
2. Introduction: What was your greatest strength and weakness? Explain why these were strengths and how you can overcome your weakness.
3. Body: What was your greatest strength and weakness? Explain why these were strengths and how you can overcome your weakness.
4. Research: What was your greatest strength and weakness? Explain why these were strengths and how you can overcome your weakness.
5. Organization: What was your greatest strength and weakness? Explain why these were strengths and how you can overcome your weakness.
6. Language: What was your greatest strength and weakness? Explain why these were strengths and how you can overcome your weakness.
7. Delivery: What was your greatest strength and weakness? Explain why these were strengths and how you can overcome your weakness.
8. Speaker Knowledge: What was your greatest strength and weakness? Explain why these were strengths and how you can overcome your weakness.
9. Visual Aids: What was your greatest strength and weakness? Explain why these were strengths and how you can overcome your weakness.
10. Conclusion: What was your greatest strength and weakness? Explain why these were strengths and how you can overcome your weakness.
Please conclude with an overall evaluation of yourself as a speaker, based on your performance this term.
1 – Topic.) My topic was not the topic for me, and that was probably my biggest overall weakness in my entire speech. I wasn’t passionate about it, and I think that ruptured the flow of my speech. Not being passionate about my topic hindered my ability to go fully in depth and get the full effect of persuasion out to my audience. The good news is that I realize what I need to do for the upcoming/last speech, and I think that puts me at a good foundation for getting a good grade on the next one.
2 – Intro.) There were a lot of weaknesses in my introduction. The first being that I didn’t have a grabber. Really, the only strength I find in my introduction is that I went first. I say that because if I didn’t, I don’t think I would have caught my audience’s attention. Another weakness was that I didn’t state my supporting points. I kind of just left it at the title and moved on. Lastly, I didn’t establish credibility. That part frustrates me because I had it written in my outline to do so, but I didn’t execute.
3 – Body.) Organization, organization, organization (or lack thereof). My weakness was that I was unorganized. I had enough on my PowerPoint, which was a strength, but I didn’t translate that to my speech very well. I also didn’t do a good job citing my sources. Again, this is something I did well in my PowerPoint, but I didn’t verbalize them, so that is another thing to work on in my next speech. Going forward, I will focus on lengthening the body of my speech so that I can better incorporate transitions and citations, which will hopefully clean up the disorganization a bit.
7 – Delivery.) Immediately after I started, I knew my delivery wasn’t going to be as strong as I wanted it to be. I got in my head and flubbed up some words. I also repeated myself at least once, but I know that was because of my disorganization. Giving speeches virtually is tough because I never really know where to look, but I had a feeling that my eye contact was off a bit. Otherwise, my tone, and loudness of my voice was good – that has never been a problem for me.
9 – Visual Aids.) My weakness in visual aid was the lack thereof. My PowerPoint was wordy and I could have benefited to use more imagery, especially considering I need to lengthen the body of my speech. My strength is that the images I did use were valuable and relevant, and overall, I do find this to be much of a worry as visual cues are an easy fix and I have used them properly in my previous speeches.
Evaluation: Overall, I think of myself as a fine public speaker. I have never been afraid or nervous to talk in front of others, which definitely plays to my strengths in terms of delivery. I’m especially confident when I am passionate about my topic, and I find that when that is the case, everything flows much better. After this term, I know where my weaknesses are, and I’m figuring out how to fix them…even if it took until the persuasive speech to figure it out. I play to my strengths and I need to remember that when I give speeches going forward, and even though this persuasive speech didn’t go as well as I had wanted, there’s a chance to redeem myself.