PeerEditor: ________________________ Author of Essay: _____________________
I. TITLE – Evaluate the title of the essay.
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Write down the title of the essay. If the essay does not have a title, make a note of it so that the author can add one before turning in the essay.
1. Is the title interesting?
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Is it a mere repetition of the title of the assignment (e.g., This I Believe Essay, Profile Essay, Film Essay, or Waiting for Superman Essay)
II. INTRODUCTION – Evaluate the author’s introductory paragraph.
1. What techniques does the author use to catch the reader’s attention (e.g., a question, a shocking statement, a quotation)?
2. Find the author’s thesis statement and write it down. If the author doesn’t have a thesis statement, make a note of it so that he/she can change it.
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Does the introduction capture your interest? If not, why? Note: Your answer should not be merely “yes” or “no.” You should explain your answer.
III. What could the author do to improve this aspect of the essay? Note: “Nothing” is not an appropriate answer to this question.
IV. BODY PARAGRAPHS – Evaluate each body/support paragraph.
1. Evaluate the first body paragraph.
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Find the author’s topic sentence and write it down. If the author does not have a clear topic sentence, make a note of this so that he/she can add one before turning in the final draft.
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Does the topic sentence clearly relate to the thesis statement set forth in the introduction? Note: Your answer should not be merely “yes” or “no.” You should explain your answer.
· Does the rest of the paragraph support the topic sentence? Note: Your answer should not be merely “yes” or “no.” You should explain your answer.
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Does the paragraph stay on topic, or does the writer introduce ideas that are unrelated to the topic sentence? Note: Your answer should not be merely “yes” or “no.” You should explain your answer.
· Where might the writer add details and examples? Write down (at least) one assertion/point of discussion that could use more support.
2. Evaluate the second body paragraph.
· Find the author’s topic sentence and write it down. If the author does not have a clear topic sentence, make a note of this so that he/she can add one before turning in the final draft.
· Does the topic sentence clearly relate to the thesis statement set forth in the introduction? Note: Your answer should not be merely “yes” or “no.” You should explain your answer.
· Does the rest of the paragraph support the topic sentence? Note: Your answer should not be merely “yes” or “no.” You should explain your answer.
· Does the paragraph stay on topic, or does the writer introduce ideas that are unrelated to the topic sentence? Note: Your answer should not be merely “yes” or “no.” You should explain your answer.
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· Where might the writer add details and examples? Write down (at least) one assertion/point of discussion that could use more support.
3. Evaluate the third body paragraph.
· Find the author’s topic sentence and write it down. If the author does not have a clear topic sentence, make a note of this so that he/she can add one before turning in the final draft.
· Does the topic sentence clearly relate to the thesis statement set forth in the introduction? Note: Your answer should not be merely “yes” or “no.” You should explain your answer.
· Does the rest of the paragraph support the topic sentence? Note: Your answer should not be merely “yes” or “no.” You should explain your answer.
· Does the paragraph stay on topic, or does the writer introduce ideas that are unrelated to the topic sentence? Note: Your answer should not be merely “yes” or “no.” You should explain your answer.
· Where might the writer add details and examples? Write down (at least) one assertion/point of discussion that could use more support.
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Repeat the procedure outlined above for each additional body paragraph.
V. CONCLUSION – Evaluate the conclusion.
1. Does the conclusion adequately reinforce/summarize the key elements of the essay? Note: Your answer should not be merely “yes” or “no.” You should explain your answer.
2. Does the conclusion clearly relate to the thesis and the topic sentences?
3. Does the author introduce new points of discussion that are not mentioned previously in the essay? If so, make a note of this so that the author can correct this later.
4. Does the author begin the conclusion with an over-used phrase, such as “In conclusion” or “Last but not least”? If so, make a note of this so that the author can correct this aspect of his/her essay.
VI. FORMATTING – Is the essay formatted according to MLA guidelines?
1. Spacing
· Is the essay double-spaced throughout?
· Are there extra spaces above or below the title of the essay or between paragraphs? If so, make a note of this so that the author can go back and correct this later.
2. Heading
· Is there an appropriate heading at the top of the first page?
· Make sure that the heading appears only on the first page.
· Make sure that the heading is exactly 1” from the top of the page.
· Make sure that the entries in the heading are in the correct order:
Author’s Name
Instructor’s Name
Name of Course
Date (in military format – e.g., 12 Feb. 2012)
3. Title
· Is the title written in a 12 point font?
· The title should not be underlined, bolded, or italicized. If it is, make a note of this so that the author can go back and correct this later.
4. Page Numbering
· Do the author’s last name and the page number appear in the top right corner of every page? If not, make a note of this so that the author can go back and correct this later.
· Are the author’s last name and the page number exactly ½” from the top of the page. If not, make a note of this so that the author can go back and correct this later.
VII. GRAMMAR & USAGE
1. Does the writer use second person pronouns (i.e., you, your, etc.)? Highlight these pronouns so that the writer can go back and remove them later.
2. Does the writer use contractions (i.e., isn’t, doesn’t, can’t)? Highlight these contractions so that the writer can go back and remove them later.
3. Going through the essay one paragraph at a time, note any sentences or words you do not understand or have a hard time reading.
4. Note any problems with punctuation.
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Highlight any clichés so that the writer can remove them.
6. Highlight any slang so that the writer can remove these words/phrases later.
VIII. List five (5) things that the author can do to improve his/her essay. Note: “Nothing” is not an appropriate answer to this or any of the other questions.
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Dualeh
Haliil Dualeh
Mrs. Wilson
ENGL 1010
04 Feb. 2022
I Believe in Science Education
Have you ever gone outside and questioned how is nature so beautiful? Why is science a subject needed for almost any professional job we are trying to get? Why is science so important when you don’t need it? There are many different subjects you can learn in the world. People see some subjects as small things and others see them as big things. Many people go after learning math, history, science, and even english. People need to look at the smaller subjects to learn more. One of those subjects is science. The importance of science education is to increase people’s knowledge and look at the world differently. It is important to have some knowledge of science education to help you learn new things the world may not know. I chose to talk about this topic because it plays an important role in the education system. I also think this subject should be taken seriously in schools around the world.
Learning science will help a person understand the world around us. Science education makes you go outside and wonder. The deeper we look into science, the more we open our eyes and learn mysterious things about science. Someone who doesn’t know anything about how things in the universe work tend to be more curious about it. This makes the whole process more pleasing. A person starting off at a young age will lead to a brighter future because the young ask a lot of questions of our surroundings. I hear the younger children ask questions like, “Why is the sky blue?”, “What is a black hole?”, or “How are rainbows made?” These types of questions push the children into wanting to learn more about science. This doesn’t only apply to children. We see adults and older people ask the same types of questions. We see even professionals such as major scientists or chemists ask simple questions. We learn from those simple questions and build off of those questions to be more complex questions. There’s almost always an answer in science to every question. After having an answer, we then see the world differently in ways we never imagined before.
Science is a subject that makes every student excited and looking forward to the class. Learning science can lead students into being delighted and curious. Science education could be the light and path to their future. We see the light in the students as we discuss how we dissect a frog in biology class. We see the shocking faces of students when the teacher makes a chemical substance that explodes. We can give a path for students to the science world. Then we will see more students emerging into scientists, biochemists, physicians, geoscientists, and etc.
Science is a subject that will never die out. Science is also the subject that doesn’t keep us in the past. Without science, we would be far back where humans couldn’t do things we do today. This will push students into wanting to learn more and more about science.
Learning science is just as important as learning other subjects like math or history. We can even say that science is more important than other subjects, like math. I believe that we need science because we use science everyday in our lives. We use science in our medicines, food, energy, and our everyday things we do daily. On the other hand, math is needed for certain things in life. If you look at the bigger picture, you would also agree that science is more important or equally important than math. Science requires you to find answers like other subjects. Making a mistake in science is way different than making a mistake in another subject. For example, if a student is learning in the medicine field and that student cheats his way through the major, then there could be consequences. That one student could be making medicine for an ill person and one mistake can lead to another person’s death. Without the proper science education, this could lead to a bigger conflict. On the other hand, if you made a mathematical error like getting the amount of change wrong for a customer, then it isn’t that big.
Learning science will help you develop problem-solving skills in the real world. Science education will help you think logically and solve more problems. Science is meant to be learnt in the early years to allow any person to be a problem solver. This is to help people understand science more clearly and solve problems at a younger age. Science improves your problem solving skills by using the scientific method. This method is a way to solve problems dealing with science. For example, if you have a problem involving medicine that is needed for a cure, then science can help you solve how effective it will be. The first step in the scientific method is identifying a problem. There can never be a problem to a problem or a solution to a solution. You must have a problem at first, then find the solution. The scientific method is a step to step process that helps you in problem solving skills that you can use in your daily life. There are many other ways to improve problem solving skills in science.
In conclusion, I believe in science education and why it is important in our lives. The importance of science education is to increase people’s knowledge and look at the world differently. It is important to have some knowledge of science education to help you learn new things the world may not know. Learning science will help a person understand the world around us. Science is a subject that makes every student excited and looking forward to the class. Learning science can lead students into being curious. Learning science is just as important as learning other subjects like math or history. Learning science will help you develop problem-solving skills in the real world. Science education will help you think logically and solve more problems. Science education is relevant to my audience because everyone reading the essay has asked a question relating to science and they didn’t know. They felt so curious about the question that they looked up their science question or even asked a professional the question.