Use below my words keys to be sucess
I think to be successful I must have determination, patience along with perseverance. By doing so I must be a person with a strong desire to succeed and achieve what I want in life. I should keep good behavior towards others and be aware of the consequences of my actions and be disciplined, mature, and use them thoughtfully.
Major Writing Assignment
Note: It is essential to follow the Writing Process; do not skip steps as this will cost you time in the long run.
Topic: Characteristics of successful students
What characteristics are essential for success in college, career, and in life.
Audience: Teens through adults
Assignment: (Minimum of 4 typed pages; maximum 6 typed pages: Times New Roman, 12, default 1” margins)
Identify qualities or characteristics that successful students exhibit or need to develop. Select 4-5 of these characteristics and write an essay in which you discuss each of these characteristics and to what extent you exhibit them.
· Begin by reading the directions carefully.
· Begin brainstorming by making a list of different characteristics or traits. Then select 4-5 that you feel you already have. Or select 2-3 that you already have and 1-2 that you need to work on.
· Once you have identified the characteristics you will be writing about, start jotting down ideas to develop these characteristics. You might want to have 4 pages – one for each characteristic when you brainstorm ideas.
· Review your notes and answers, group some ideas together, add more ideas or delete some ideas
· Analyze your notes, highlight or circle several ideas that you think are related and that you feel are important to you. ONLY choose those ideas and examples that you feel strongly about, quality ideas that your reader will find interesting or ideas that are not plain basic statements or universal truths.
· Based on your pre-writing and ideas, generate a working thesis statement following the formula:
o Topic + your opinion + reasons why the reader should agree with you or accept your opinion OR
o Topic + attitude + list of specific characteristics you will be discussing
· Create an outline before beginning to draft your essay. The outline format example is on the back of this document. Make sure you follow the MLA guidelines formatting your outline and your essay.
· Remember, the more you think, plan, and organize, the easier it will be to write the actual essay.
A. Attention-getter/hook your reader – use a quote, an anecdote, a story, or some interesting facts
B. Provide some general background about the topic
C. State your Claim = thesis statement (the last sentence in your introduction)
II. Body paragraphs. For this paper you will have 4-5 depending on how many characteristics you have selected
A. Body paragraph 1 – focus on ONE characteristic ONLY
1. Topic sentence
2. Explain your characteristic;
3. Close your paragraph
B. Body paragraphs 2-4 or 2-5 – follow the same pattern as you did for body paragraph 1
III. Conclusion – wrap up your paper.
A. For inspiration look at your introduction and see how you bring closure to some of your ideas,
B. restate your thesis statement/claim,
C. summarize your body paragraphs in 1-2 sentences.
D. If you are stuck, ask a friend to read your paper and tell you what it is about in his/her own words. Write those words down and see if you can get inspired
IV. Submit your Annotated Bibliography assignment here. It will have to be one file – see examples using the links I posted last week. Your file has to be saved in Word OR if you are using Mac computer, save your file in .rtf format. If I cannot open your file, I will not be able to grade it.
Professor Anna Schmidt
May 19, 2020
Characteristics of Successful students
Success is a highly desired goal that can be both quite easy and difficult thing to meet in
life. One of the areas where success is required is school and unless one has suitable features that
lead towards achievement of the end product, nothing much can happen in their life. Jack
Canfield one of the greatest philosopher who wrote the book The Success Principles reminds
everyone that it is a myths to attach great life to someone else. “The real truth about being
successful is that you are responsible for the quality of life you live, income, debts, feelings,
health, and relationships (Canfield 2).”
As such, success is highly indebted in a strong personality who is determined, patient,
persevering, focused, disciplined, mature, and critical individual. They focus towards a set goal,
can go through challenges without becoming hopeless, they strongly desire to succeed hence act
in the best interest of the teachers , parents and friends, they think about everything they have to
do or say, and they are aware that their actions have consequences.
II. Body paragraphs.
A self-motivated or rather determined attribute is a sure sign that someone is a symbol of
success. With self-determination anyone can find purpose in life and come up with appropriate
actions or plans that enhance discovery of personally meaningful goals and dreams. Many iconic
put commas around this part of your sentence – you are adding some information that needs to be set off by commas.
This is ONLY for the outline. You do not need this subheading for a foral essay. I should be able to tell where your body paragraphs begin if you structure your essay effectively 🙂
Quotations marks go around the actual quote, but outside the parenthesis with the author’s last name.
Are you sure this is the word you wanted to use here?
I am confused – is this a new paragrpah or are you conntinuing the previous paragraph? Remember, if you are starting a new paragraph, you need to indent the first line.
people that stand in the history managed to be what they are because they were determined that
they would set goals, work towards them and achieve in life. There are a massive people
including Martin Luther King, Barrack Obama, Nelson Mandela emerged as heroes from zero
just because of the self-motivation they had. Self-determination is like faith which can move
mountains. According to Field, Shaw, & Sarver self-determined individuals engage in self-
regulated, goal-directed, and autonomous behavior (340). Self-determination theory proves that
in education, a student must develop interest for learning, value what they learn and have
confidence in their capabilities for it enhances desired educational outcomes (Legault 2).
Therefore, self-determination go hand in hand with academic achievement and a student who is
destined to succeed will obviously have this characteristic.
Successful students exhibit an admirable masterly of self-Management through a patient
and persevering personality. Patience and perseverance are attributes that encourage someone to
plan and act in pursuit of their goals and dreams. Patient people set goals and hardly give up
even when they are not fulfilling it instantly. They never give up or get disappointed even when
times are hard and unfavorable for them. Look as if things are normal, they might be blamed for
mistakes they did not do and wait for the real time when truth will prevail. They may miss a meal
yet Mahatma Gandhi is one of the early people to realize this hence he said ‘there is more to life
than increasing speed (Connolly 33).’ Schooling requires patience, perseverance for one has to
sit understanding concepts work repetitively on a complex mathematical concept before they
master it, or read voluminous books to acquire required language competence through the night
while studying for exams. When I was a student I saw many students who wanted shortcuts and
they could avoid taking time to read, they could them seek a way of acquiring question papers
beforehand. They could even pay for the papers and look for other people to answer these papers
I think you are missing a word or two here 😉
in MLA we only use the author’s last name for sources that came fron onlien publications.
Please, check this sentence – the structure is off. Maybe you need to re-write this sentence to say “who emerged as…”
only to be astonishes with different exams that never matched what they paid for. Thus, with
patience and perseverance a student is able to commit and gain better control of their learning
schedules and content.
It is easy to spot a successful student from a crowd because of the great level of discipline
and maturity they prevail. These are people who are interdependent so that they always build
mutually supportive relationships which enhance their achievement of set goals and dreams. It is
hard to find a successful student making noise in class, harassing others, sneaking out of school
or conducting other mischievous activities. Teacher establish peace and serenity in the presence
of these learners because they focus on what they want. These are the kind of students who want
to be in school all the time, they want to be as close to the teacher and books as possible. They
are role models within a school, a college, or a university and inspire beginners or others to live
and behave like them. They therefore learn school rules and regulations by heart and stay out of
the don’ts. In one study by Ehaine, he realized that discipline encourages students to have good
behaviour and that affects the overall academic performance (183). As such, successful students
are always in charge of their discipline and behave maturely because they target achievement.
Successful students thrive on critical and focused attributes that make them both self-
motivated and lifelong learners. These are students who do not read for exams alone, they use
every opportunity to learn something new. If you get into a challenge with then, they can move
from weather, to politics, to business, and life in general. Such learners have reasons for doing or
avoiding certain ways of life or activities. They have careers which are not presented to them by
anyone, but which they go for because they understand which strengths they have .These learners
discover personal weaknesses and handle them, they can even keep quiet when someone wants
to annoy them. They are journalists at a tender age, doctors in their teenage years and know
When you provide data and research information, please, make sure it is connected to your topic. The study you are referencing was done in Nigeria. That is fine, but you need to acknowledge that and show how it is relevant in the US. That will give you a greater credibility as a writer.
Comma splice. Two independent clauses connected with a comma – a mistake. Need either a semicolon or a period.
set off by commas
That is not a very effective or appropriate word here. Maybe “project”?
when injustice is due to come to them. Successful students have an outstanding self-awareness
that surrounds them. They think, believe, and behave consciously in a manner which keeps them
on course. Some teachers might think they are boastful or trying to downplay them when in
reality they are just asserting what they know. Indeed, nothing can change the goals and focus on
successful student because it is within their chemistry.
Overall, success is one of the concepts in human life that either matures or aborts in the
lives of many people, especially while at school. The fate of success depends on the individual
pursuing it. If they only dream without practicing them, then they remain it be failures in contrast
to those who talk the walk. From the many testimonies and observation of diverse people, the
reality of determining what a successful student is does not lie. A successful student will easily
be defined by their high levels of determination, patience, perseverance, focus, discipline,
maturity and criticality. As seen above, successful student know that they have to achieve in life
regardless of the challenges, they avoid rash decisions, as well as weigh their actions and
reactions. Besides, there are people who act beyond their age and could take charge of others
when no adult is available because of how thoughtful, reflective and critical they are.
Canfield, Jack. The Success Principles. Harper Collins Books. (2015).1-94. <
Connolly, Mike. The resilient Principles. (2007): 32-35. <
Ehaine, Stanley. Discipline and Academic Performance (A Study of Selected secondary Schools
in Lagos, Nigeria). International Journal of Academic Research in Progressive
Education and Development 3(1), (2014):181-193. DOI: 10.6007/IJARPED/v3-i1/758
Field Sharon, Shaw Stan, and Sarver Mary. Self-Determination in Remedial and Special
Education 24(6). (2017):339-349. DOI: 10.1177/07419325030240060501.
Legault, Lisa. Self-Determination Theory. In book: Encyclopedia of Personality and Individual
Differences, Editors: V. Zeigler-Hill and T. Shackelford· (2017):1-8. DOI: 10.1007/978-
Your citations are incorrect. For example, the last one should be
Legault, Lisa. Self-Determination Theory. Encyclopedia of Personality and Individual Differences, edited by V. Zeigler-Hill and T. Shackelford, 2017, pp. 1-8. DOI: 10.1007/978-3-319-28099-8_1162-1
And others also need to be corrected.
I greatly appreciate your attempt at documenting your sources. Creating a Works Cited document is not an easy feat! You have demonstrated academic reqponsibility by attempting to give credit. You remembered to put all sources in alphabetical order and such. BUT, I did not assign any research for this first essay. I did not provide any formal instruction on how to cite and document sources. AND I clearly stated that we are using MLA style. Your citations are not meeting the MLA guidelines. Some are missing information, while others are a blend of MLA and APA styles. This will hurt your grade for this paper. But I will give you an opportunity to revise, correct citations and resubmit. I will re-grade your work at the end of the semester.