Francis – this is a great revision =)
I highlighted a number of great lines in green below and only a few opportunities in red.
Don’t forget to be specific while answering journalist questions.
FEED BACK
When did you go?
Don’t forget your senses.
What does it sound like?
Is music playing?
Are families happily chatting?
What does the food taste like?
Besides delicious – be specific =)
A Review of Angler San Francisco Restaurant
While on my journey to San Francisco, I decided to have my dinner at Angler Restaurant, since this is the best restaurant known in San Francisco. The experience at this restaurant was incredible, the quality of the food that I was served, the services that I received, are all a reflection of a world-class, five-star restaurant that one could ever wish to have in their life. The experience I had with this restaurant is remarkable; I would always recommend this restaurant while in Francisco. The view from the Bay Bridge , dark wood, brick walls, and modern lightings set the tone for Angler, which I can describe as a buzzy spot that serves some of the best modern seafood in San Francisco. Angler is simply the best, rating it as 5 stars is only because the stars are five; otherwise, it is beyond the services and the quality of the food, world-class.
San Francisco’s people obsessed with the seafood are always flocking to Angler since it was opened in 2018. Its location, the central Embacardero, and the slightly buttoned-up vibe beckon the customers in business-casual life attire. When I entered the restaurant, I found its ground floor full, to the brim, I had to be taken to the first floor where there was space. At the heart of the beverage menu at Angler is a cellar that celebrates classic wine regions from all over the world, not only from the old school but also the news school.
My experience at the restaurant was overall excellent; I had a chance to be served with the different plates of seafood offered on their premises. I ate prawns and scorpion fish over red embers, which I can testify that I have never had a chance to have such a delicious meal previously. Chef Joshua Skenes has outshined himself by using ingredients obtained from local fishers and gatherers to get us the oriented microclimate menu that can’t be compared to any of the restaurants in the city. I also had a chance to have a drink on the premises; the cocktails pack a punch and stay pretty simple ingredients (Stainback, G. A.,2019). The beverage menu has a variety of classic wines that are celebrated the globally-from Loire to the Douro, out of the new world to the old world.
The timely service offered by the staff, even though the activity in the restaurant is getting busy, also made me have a great experience with them. The services are always offered with high perfection to satisfy customers’ needs. One can also enjoy the free internet available while waiting for the services; the internet can be of much significance to one since you can communicate with your business partners regardless of the place you are. In a nutshell, I had a great time enjoying their free internet while waiting for their services.
With the great experience I had, I rate Angler as a 5 star because the quality of food and services offered by the staff are overall exemplary best compared to other world-class restaurants that I have ever visited. I hereby endorse Angler restaurant to anyone visiting San Francisco city as it is the best place to be within the city for dinners and dates. The beautiful bay bridge views, woods that are dark, walls made of bricks and modern lighting with a buzzy spot serving some of the best modern seafood in San Francisco.
REFERENCE
Stainback, G. A., Fedler, T., Davis III, S. E., & KC, B. (2019). Recreational fishing in Florida Bay: economic significance and angler perspectives. Tourism in Marine Environments, 14(1-2), 89-105.
REVISION PLAN
First, download and open the feedback you received from your instructor on your draft review in Moodle.
Second, read the feedback carefully. Ask your instructor for clarification if there is anything you do not completely understand.
Third, if your instructor has listed particular grammar issues you need to work on, do a Google search to find out how to correct the issue in your writing moving forward.
Assignment 1: Write a revision plan in two paragraphs in a Word document, following the structure of the below example. Be sure to address each point in your instructor’s feedback.
Revision Plan: Substantive Issues
1. Rewrite my thesis statement to improve it for clarity and consistency.
2. Add another support paragraph to my evaluation section.
3. Rework my paragraph structure so that each body paragraph has a topic sentence, a concluding sentence, and a transition.
Revision Plan: Stylistic Issues
1. Edit my essay for concision and word choice. Rephrase passages to avoid confusion and to be as clear and direct as possible.
2. Edit verb tense errors.
3. Correct spelling mistakes and typos.
Assignment 2: Revise the review you wrote last week.
Activity 1: After completing your revision plan, complete your first round of revisions based on that plan and your instructor’s feedback from last week.
Activity 2: After completing your discussion for the week, consider your audience and do a second round of revisions based on improving your writing for that specific audience.
Activity 3: Do a final proofread for grammar, spelling, and formatting. Submit your final review and your revision plan to Moodle below.
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